Talk:Finding Marlin/@comment-28488428-20161024022153

Okay, here's my list of scenes I would recommend you change.

The plot part of Marlin finding his parents rips off the plot part of Dory finding her parents in Finding Dory, so if possible I'd recommend you make that plot arc different. Maybe it's Marlin just finding Coral.

The beginning scene with young Marlin and his parents may be too similar to the beginning scene in Finding Dory with young Dory and her parents. My suggestion: start with Marlin dreaming about the baracuda and Coral, like your second paragraph, and delete the first paragraph/scene.

'''Soto (David L. Lander), the leader of a barracuda pack, watches the fishes with his trusted lieutenant, a piranha named Dave (Denis Leary). Soto intends to devour Marlin's wife, Coral, and their eggs, planning an attack for the next afternoon. The attack takes place after Soto slaps Marlin back into the anemone, with Dave pursuing Coral (who has hidden an egg that is damaged), but she escapes' ''- This scene is a ripoff of the scene in Ice Age where Soto and Diego plan to steal the baby from the humans, and the scene where Diego chases the baby's mother. I recommend this scene be deleted.

Also, you MUST change the name Soto because that name rips off Soto from Ice Age, and if you keep that name Finding Marlin won't be made into a real movie.

The scene where Marlin goes with Nemo and the kids to watch the sardine migration and Marlin gets caught in the undertow is a ripoff of the scene in Finding Dory where Dory goes with Nemo and the kids to watch the stingray migration and gets caught in the undertow. This scene (paragraph 3) should be changed or deleted.

The scene where Marlin, Nemo, and Dory take the current to New Zealand, Marlin awakens the megalodon which chases Nemo, and Marlin runs away in guilt is a ripoff of the scene in Finding Dory where they take the current to California, Dory awakens the giant squid which chases Nemo, and Dory runs away in guilt. This scene should be changed or deleted.

That's quite a bit to start with, so I'll stop there and make more recommendations later.

Remember these are only suggestions, you don't have to take them on board, but if you want Finding Marlin to become a real film I'd suggest you do make the changes. IceAgeFanfromKiwiLand (talk) 02:21, October 24, 2016 (UTC)